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There are suicide nets
Strung up under the catwalks
For you, my love.
There's an electric fence
On this hotel room balcony
And paper knives and forks
Instead of silver cutlery
For you, my love.
I bought you something
Clean and new -
A self-help book and some laceless shoes
For you, my love.
I keep your medication in a locked drawer;
I know you're done, you're through,
I know exactly what you're looking for.
I mean, I can't really blame you,
Even if I can't wake up, look at the sky,
And want nothing more than to lie back down and die.

And, I mean,
Maybe I'm selfish, keeping you alive,
Maybe I'm weak and I need you around.
And maybe I'm asking you to please stick around,
If only
For me, my love.
'Cause maybe if you
Fall through those suicide nets,
Maybe if you
Wrap your fingers through that electric fence,
Maybe if you
Paper-cut your insides on those paper forks and knives,
Maybe if you
Pick that lock and swallow those pills,
Then maybe I'll be alone
And someone else will come along
And hold me close and ask me why
I can wake up and look at the sky
And want nothing more than to lie back down and die.
And I'll promise them I'll stay alive
If they say,
For me, my love.

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It didn't turn out how I thought it would, but there it is.

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~DannyMechanist Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It does ofcoures convey a certain feeling that the protagonist feels hollow to have the one in question and still just sticks around for the comfort of having someone and the fear that if he ends it then it would put his lover through misery.... a true lover's sentiment if there ever was one
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~FlinchSaint Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! And I agree that some parts are a little out of place, I think I could build on this and trim it in certain areas; it was one of those poems that seem to come from nowhere, and those are the ones I tend to have the most trouble with structurally.
Thank you for the feedback, very much appreciated. :D
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~DannyMechanist Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Not at all... It's a good piece and poems that come from a certain emotional and mental state are often more free verse.... I know coz i have the same problem :P
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~DannyMechanist Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Its nice especially the start and the end does seem a little out of place here and there but that just adds to the sadistic appeal i guess
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